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Post by Pruz on Jun 8, 2017 7:09:04 GMT -4
I leave my thoughts
Spilling for you.
I save my mind
For something worthwhile.
And I
I can speak my mind. (Just fine.)
'Cause I...
Have no...
Bad thoughts.
You won't be left in the dark.
I keep a good mind
At times.
Telling you that
You'll be alright.
But I know they come back
They come back to you.
Everything is not fi-ine.
When just you are blue.
I
Want to go
To Some place new
But you
In your bed
Can't see through.
And sometimes I dream
Sometimes I wonder
Why aren't you happy?
Why are you flustered?
(It's the) bad thoughts.
You won't be left in the dark.
I keep a good mind
At times.
Telling you that
You'll be alright.
But I know they come back
They come back to you.
Everything is not fi-ine.
When just you are blue.
How do I go if you are stopped
How do I move if you don't walk
Don't act like I don't care for you.
Maybe it's why I talk to you.
What in the hell is wrong with you
I just cannot find the truth.
I just want to see you smile
Make it worth the lasting while.
(But it's the) bad thoughts.
You won't be left in the dark.
I keep a good mind
At times.
Telling you that
You'll be alright.
But I know they come back
They come back to you.
Everything is not fi-ine.
When just you are blue.
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Post by Bannanachair on Jun 8, 2017 8:27:23 GMT -4
You're a bad songwriter (or, at the very least, appealing to a sufficiently niche audience that I don't particularly enjoy reading reading your songwriting).
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Post by Pruz on Jun 8, 2017 9:39:46 GMT -4
This song was supposed to be focused on the words per se, but I wrote this to practice songs that stretch in two octaves and amplify in volume. I wanted to try something new.
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Post by Pruz on Jun 8, 2017 9:53:06 GMT -4
...And I have a few songs that are based on others where they make no sense to the reader/listener, but to me they do... and others that have muffled sections, some I didn't even write down...
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Post by Pruz on Jun 8, 2017 9:54:13 GMT -4
"I am a very avid songwriter." I say as the last original song I wrote was from three hours ago.
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Post by Bannanachair on Jun 8, 2017 10:55:11 GMT -4
This song was supposed to be focused on the words per se, but I wrote this to practice songs that stretch in two octaves and amplify in volume. I wanted to try something new. The thing is that those lyrics make no sense to me; I can't figure out what you're singing about in that song. I also have no idea what the music sounds like so I was only criticizing the lyrics; could you upload an image of the sheet music? |
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Post by Pruz on Jun 8, 2017 11:10:22 GMT -4
I don't have sheet music for this one. I just have the beginning but it's not written down on paper yet.
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Post by Pruz on Jun 8, 2017 11:19:30 GMT -4
And this one isn't one that I made to be hard to understand.
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Post by Bannanachair on Jun 8, 2017 11:24:48 GMT -4
And this one isn't one that I made to be hard to understand. Nobody writes with the intent being to be hard to understand. That's why I pointed out that your song's lyrics seem like near gibberish to me; that way you can reword it to make more sense. |
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Post by Death on Jun 8, 2017 11:30:29 GMT -4
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Post by Pruz on Jun 8, 2017 11:38:08 GMT -4
It's not a rap.
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Post by Death on Jun 8, 2017 11:40:54 GMT -4
still doesn't make the video any less relevant
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Post by Pruz on Jun 8, 2017 11:58:59 GMT -4
I'm not even going to write music as a profession.
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Post by Pruz on Jun 9, 2017 8:08:12 GMT -4
When you decide to go on the vocal route and then you quit. m.imgur.com/VxijNbBI don't even blame myself. |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 9, 2017 19:13:38 GMT -4
maybe I'm just reading it wrong (I'm not used to base clef) but I'm pretty sure clef doesn't change that E# and F are the same note.
first measure.
if it sounds off, that may be one reason why.
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Post by Bannanachair on Jun 9, 2017 20:35:12 GMT -4
maybe I'm just reading it wrong (I'm not used to base clef) but I'm pretty sure clef doesn't change that E# and F are the same note. first measure. if it sounds off, that may be one reason why. E# and F are indeed the same note, but that's not the strangest thing about that. That song is clearly in F major (or D minor) and yet it ends with a C. |
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Post by Bannanachair on Jun 9, 2017 20:47:31 GMT -4
Also there is no key signature there for some reason.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 9, 2017 20:50:05 GMT -4
Also there is no key signature there for some reason. Yeah, I was wondering if there was supposed to be one. I tried to assemble the song together on the program I use, but it didn't sound right. Or at least not right as I would imagine it- though I'd say it's not quite right in the eyes of the composer either, seeing as he gave up. |
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Post by Pruz on Jun 10, 2017 0:47:08 GMT -4
I don't put a key signature until I'm completely finished with adding the notes to the song, which will never happen because I quit on this one.
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Post by Pruz on Jun 10, 2017 0:48:49 GMT -4
Like in "Shine" on my musescore. Yet I have a few sharped notes on the staff that make the note a double sharp that I need to remove. (Somehow they still make the sound of a regular sharped note. That's probably why I missed it.
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Post by Pruz on Jun 10, 2017 1:04:07 GMT -4
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Post by Bannanachair on Jun 10, 2017 4:12:01 GMT -4
I don't put a key signature until I'm completely finished with adding the notes to the song, which will never happen because I quit on this one. Adding a key signature is literally the first step in composing something. |
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Post by Pruz on Jun 10, 2017 4:13:50 GMT -4
Well maybe there is no key signature. Maybe some notes on the same line will be sharped or naturalled.
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Post by Pruz on Jun 10, 2017 4:14:43 GMT -4
But if you're looking for a song with key signatures, I've made some of those. Some are three minutes long.
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Post by Bannanachair on Jun 10, 2017 9:05:22 GMT -4
Well maybe there is no key signature. Maybe some notes on the same line will be sharped or naturalled. Okay, somebody really ought to give you an introductory course in musical theory. |
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